This is my new scribble, which is going through the suspenseful moments of an adolescent boy during his endeavor to save the life of his sister.
Rotating the hands insanely;
In the deepness of a well he was;
Water could submerge him twice.
Endeavor to save the life of his sister,
who fell accidentally in the well;
She, being baby and helpless,
nothing prevented him;
jumped in, quickly following her;
as he might have lost her unless.
or entire world might have lost her fondly face.
But the things found to be horror;
excessive water was trouble enough
to get close her in the hands;
Being adolescent himself
only affection that led him
sacrificing himself for the sibling.
Despite the suffocation due to
repeatedly sinking,
he was adamant on action;
darkness entered in the eyes
being anxious whereabouts she was;
passing suspenseful moments
eventually touched her tip of hair
caught vigorously as a lightning of hope,
floated with her on the water surface;
hugged her with one hand
firmly posted the other on the step;
Screaming, shivering
And also she was trembling.
But, found uninjured!
He, sighed with extreme relief;
Satisfied by the chance
to save a precious life
Of whom he was fond of
by the grace of the Omnipotent!
Poem by Shukoor
Click here to read Malayalam version of this poem.
Rotating the hands insanely;
In the deepness of a well he was;
Water could submerge him twice.
Endeavor to save the life of his sister,
who fell accidentally in the well;
She, being baby and helpless,
nothing prevented him;
jumped in, quickly following her;
as he might have lost her unless.
or entire world might have lost her fondly face.
But the things found to be horror;
excessive water was trouble enough
to get close her in the hands;
Being adolescent himself
only affection that led him
sacrificing himself for the sibling.
Despite the suffocation due to
repeatedly sinking,
he was adamant on action;
darkness entered in the eyes
being anxious whereabouts she was;
passing suspenseful moments
eventually touched her tip of hair
caught vigorously as a lightning of hope,
floated with her on the water surface;
hugged her with one hand
firmly posted the other on the step;
Screaming, shivering
And also she was trembling.
But, found uninjured!
He, sighed with extreme relief;
Satisfied by the chance
to save a precious life
Of whom he was fond of
by the grace of the Omnipotent!
Poem by Shukoor
Click here to read Malayalam version of this poem.
Simply Superb.
ReplyDeleteCongrats.
Cheer up.....
ReplyDeletethe way phrased the lines
are quiet interesting...........
Work ahead hard...to hit
the stars...
Thanks for your nice words Mr Mansoor and Jabir
ReplyDeleteI would urge you to master English grammar first!
ReplyDeleteThanks Mr Anonymus. I am still an English language student and just endeavoring to express my feelings. Your criticism urges me to be bothered more about the Language proficiency.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Mr. Anonymous. I am still an English language student and I am just trying to express my feelings. Your criticism urges me to bother more about the language proficiency.
ReplyDeleteHi dear Momin, I think the judgements of other readers also to be considered in this regard.
ReplyDeleteIn case of any flaw pointed out in the posts, will be regretted and corrected without any hesitation.
Thanks
I THINK ENGLISH VERSION IS BETTER THAN MALAYALAM.......KEEP IT UP...
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